I wonder why the tiny people were taking photos Hunter? What do you think? The clouds are big and dark, but what do they look like? How tough are its fingers? They are as tough as........? There are a few things extra for you to think about. Keep up the great work Hunter.
I think they are taking photos because the robot it so large. I think maybe the clouds are thunder and lightning and I'm sure his fingers would crush anything he wanted.
Kia ora Hunter, Well done with having a go at some descriptive writing. You have included some fantastic examples, and should be very proud of your efforts! Writing a story full of adjectives and adverbs is so important because it is the details within a story which help capture the audience. Think about these two sentences; ‘I sat down outside and ate my lunch’ and ‘I sat down on the luscious, green grass outside and ate my peanut butter sandwich for lunch’. Which one would you rather read? The first sentence sounds a little boring, but with a few extra words added in it was easily transformed into a way more exciting and enticing sentence. I really like the descriptions you have included in your writing. Words such as ‘big’, ‘dark’, ‘tiny’, ‘massive’, and ‘gigantic’ are all fantastic examples because they allow you to visualise images in your head. It is also great to see your descriptive writing next to the image it was based off so I am able to get a good idea as to what you were talking about. Overall this is a great post, and I look forward to seeing more of your work! Nga mihi
Hi Hunter
ReplyDeleteThis is a neat picture to describe. I quite like the colours in it. Why did you choose this picture?
I wonder why the tiny people were taking photos Hunter? What do you think? The clouds are big and dark, but what do they look like? How tough are its fingers? They are as tough as........? There are a few things extra for you to think about. Keep up the great work Hunter.
ReplyDeleteI think they are taking photos because the robot it so large. I think maybe the clouds are thunder and lightning and I'm sure his fingers would crush anything he wanted.
DeleteKia ora Hunter,
ReplyDeleteWell done with having a go at some descriptive writing. You have included some fantastic examples, and should be very proud of your efforts!
Writing a story full of adjectives and adverbs is so important because it is the details within a story which help capture the audience.
Think about these two sentences; ‘I sat down outside and ate my lunch’ and ‘I sat down on the luscious, green grass outside and ate my peanut butter sandwich for lunch’.
Which one would you rather read?
The first sentence sounds a little boring, but with a few extra words added in it was easily transformed into a way more exciting and enticing sentence.
I really like the descriptions you have included in your writing. Words such as ‘big’, ‘dark’, ‘tiny’, ‘massive’, and ‘gigantic’ are all fantastic examples because they allow you to visualise images in your head.
It is also great to see your descriptive writing next to the image it was based off so I am able to get a good idea as to what you were talking about.
Overall this is a great post, and I look forward to seeing more of your work!
Nga mihi